Hey guys, Just wanted your opinion on the cover letter I'm going to email with my CV to apply for the cultural representative program. Any pointers will be appreciated The letter: Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to express my interest in the Disneyland Florida cultural representative program. After working with children through ice hockey coaching and summer schools with Italian students, I feel I have a lot of energy and enthusiasm to give to the job. Being an ice hockey goaltender I’ve always had the chance to express myself as an individual, keep myself determined and focused on what I hope to attain. Working with children in the sport allows me to pass on my knowledge and help younger people to enjoy the sport. It’s very satisfying to pass on knowledge of something that’s familiar to myself to the kids I help teach. Seeing them learn new things and succeed because of skills I have helped them develop is very satisfying. There’s nothing quite like watching a younger goalie celebrate after a win! Working at the university of Essex and Roehampton in the summer of 2005 with visiting Italian students allowed me to take part in a fun atmosphere, while at the same time ensuring the kids were safe and learning as much about England as possible during their visit. Taking the kids on visits to places such as Canterbury, Cambridge and London allowed me to supervise groups of 30 children, while teaching them about the areas they were visiting. I made a lot of new friends and got to enjoy seeing how much the kids enjoyed learning about England. It was a lot of fun organising activites to ensure they were always having fun and making sure their summer experience was unforgettable. (I'm gonna put pics of me working in the summer school here - but due to obvious reasons I'm not gonna put up pics of me and the Italians on the net) Having previously spent a year studying in Pennsylvania I’m no stranger to the American society and ways of life, something I hope to experience again in the near future. I’m graduating in July of 2007 and to have work abroad once I’ve graduated would be incredibly exciting. I enjoy representing my country and take great pride in my work; I also have a great sense of humour and love to help people have fun and smile. Being raised on Disney films certainly helped with this attitude! Looking at the outline of the cultural representative program I believe the skills I have gained in the past few years would help greatly in the cultural representative program. I hope to hear from you soon! (My name here) So - what do you guys think?
hey that sounds great u have really shown enthusiasm for the course i have been having some trouble with my cover letter so that has helped me also well done !!!!!!
firstly it's disneyworld and don't include to many pictures. you want to also appear professional. i'd cut it down a little. your resume is for detail. also try to include more about why you are interested in the program the last paragraph is great though. 'I’m graduating in July of 2007 and to have work abroad once I’ve graduated would be incredibly exciting' though i don't like the wording of this. ha! this was posred in 06. nevermind
